chick82 March 21, 2015 Share chick82 March 21, 2015 So I'm re-working my poetry book and I'd love some input. These two I just finished re-editing and would like to see what you guys think, feel, if something seems odd, or needs to be changed. I am open to your input. As you lay before me still I remember that day The elegance all around You and I becoming us The world was flawless that day The flowers highlighted by the sunlight & stained glass I reminisce that day Walking up the stairs soundlessly and gently Indulging in all the aromas around me The bold smell of mahogany stair cascading with roses Reaching the final step Looking at the door at the end of the hall Hearing the bubbles of the champagne in the glass Seeing the beautiful sunlight glancing through the crack in the door As if aligning a path to you Reaching the robust oak door The soft winds helping me push the door softly open as to not foil the surprise The sunlight striking my face as I open the door Leaving a sparkle in my eyes for a brief moment And slowly fading away as if bursting to see you The sound of the glass shattering on the floor The bursting sparkly leaving me breathless to the sight Naked in another's arms Smelling the ivory roses from the bed Engulfed in the scent of you and her The hard floor catching me softly The blood flowing around me The smell of infidelity escaping both your bodies The tears slowly falling to the ground Making a faint splash in the blood As if trying not to disturb the flow The naked salty tears on your body Trying to grasp onto me Your words cutting me as deep as the sharp glass I had fallen upon Your touch just as harsh as the hard floor And at a small moment in time Everything stopped The beautiful sunlight hitting that one piece of broken glass Still holding a small bit of champagne bubbles as if wanting to bear witness the moment All was quiet and the sparkle showed one last time With a piece of glass insight Reminding me of the scarred heart you just gave me Reaching for it And watching you collapse to the floor Reliving my pain Watching you become breathless Slowly placing my lips to yours To get back the breath you took from me As you lay before me still and this is the other one is less of a Poem and more of a Letter for forgiveness. Unforgettable Regret It’s a moment that I will never forget A look in my eyes I can never take back I piece of time that can never be given back We danced that night Jeremy didn’t spin We enjoyed time in your apartment Then he left And it was just you and I Or so we thought My heart sank in a way I will never forget A pain I have never felt again The clock ticked slowly Playing that song over and over again My favorite before this night Years would pass before I could listen to it again He loaded and unloaded the gun Over and over and over again Playing that song again and again And then he left the room to answer the door In that moment you looked in my eyes The deepest sadness, I have ever seen in my life Begging me to run away I was so scared that night In that moment I was afraid The sadness in your eyes when I shook my head no The devastation in your face A moment that would hunt me forever I swear to God had I know you would die that night I would have run I would have ran faster than I ever had in my life I’m so sorry for letting you down I let you walk out that door with him And into a grave Helpless Forgiveness I can feel Regret I cannot change Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DiXie March 21, 2015 Share DiXie March 21, 2015 *applause* Love them!!!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
chick82 March 25, 2015 Author Share chick82 March 25, 2015 Aw thanks Dixie 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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